[DictatorBunny]

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Just as the Title Says, I would like to get better. Check out my other Drawings on my DA [Only registered and activated users can see links. ] and critique those too please. Just add the name and tell me what I can improve on if you do. ^.^

[alcaray]

This is a pretty technical critique, but in the one with the blue hair, her stocking is connected to somewhere where a stocking could not be connected. Generally they hook onto something at the waist-level, right? Her's seems to go to the back of her buns.

[nothng2do]

first pic...the wrists look a bit unnatural...there should be a slight bump...
other than that i think you got talent

[digritz]

Originally Posted by alcaray

This is a pretty technical critique, but in the one with the blue hair, her stocking is connected to somewhere where a stocking could not be connected. Generally they hook onto something at the waist-level, right? Her's seems to go to the back of her buns.

You don't know much about womens undergarments do you. There are underwear that have the garter attached to the edge. Though admittedly the garter usually runs don the back and not along the side. I do not know if that was the intended look but it certainly is very plausible.

Aside from that the faces are a bit too chubby and the mouths seem out of proportion. Too small for blue bunny and bathtub girlie. Arm length is out of proportion on blue bunny also. But they are still well drawn and show promise.

[alcaray]

It is impossible for the strap to go along the side of the leg but attach in the back (and be an effective means of holding the stocking up. If she was standing straight, the strap would have to twist around her leg like a candy stripe.

[DictatorBunny]

Originally Posted by nothng2do

first pic...the wrists look a bit unnatural...there should be a slight bump...
other than that i think you got talent

Yeah, I'm still not that good at drawing hands, arms, or legs so I tend to miss certain parts of the body or I try and hide my mistakes.

Originally Posted by digritz

Aside from that the faces are a bit too chubby and the mouths seem out of proportion. Too small for blue bunny and bathtub girlie. Arm length is out of proportion on blue bunny also. But they are still well drawn and show promise.

Sweet Haruhi You are right! @.@
From the start I did notice the face, but I never noticed the arm length. The good thing is that the mouth can easily be fixed, but the arms and the face not as simple. T^T

Oh, and the underwear/stockings... it was intentional, but I thought that it might give a little more fan service if it was visible, so I placed it on the side.

Thank you guys I appreciate this. If you find anything else let me know.

I'm even more grateful that they were found on the blue haired girl. She is an important character of mine. ^-^

[Mikurus Boobs]

I like the Blue Haired one - cute & Moe!!

[DictatorBunny]

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I changed the size of the head and the left arm, Tell me what you think.

[Hifumiyo]

Originally Posted by DictatorBunny

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I changed the size of the head and the left arm, Tell me what you think.

nice!
but the thumb on the left hand looks a bit swollen if you can see what i mean.

[DictatorBunny]

Originally Posted by Hifumiyo

nice!
but the thumb on the left hand looks a bit swollen if you can see what i mean.

Yeah I can see that. 'O'

[Bele]

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