[Zaefyr]

Okay, decided to put this here, since there are also categories like this. Excellent!
Anyways, this is a sort of intro for a story me and a few of my friends have been planning, and it's my dream if I could be able to someday draw a manga based on this. It all seems so far away now, but who really knows...?

Here goes:

Crimson Earth synopsis

It's the year 2159. The world is no longer the same as the way of technology has carved its way towards the future... nowadays, the world that once was is lost. Nations of Earth have formed a single administrative organ, called EDU (Earth Defensive Union), shortened as "the Union". The Union oversees the smaller governments in different nations, while maintaining an iron grip on power.
The landscape has changed. Large portions of Europe have become a polluted wasteland, where large metropolises dot the ground. United States are also mainly polluted due to the drastic rise of population and industry. South-America and southern parts of Africa were abandoned due to an unknown incident... they are havens for wildlife now.
Northern Africa and Arabian Peninsula are scarred due to the years of constant warfare, and remain widely uninhabitable and abandoned. Scavengers and small organizations use it for their bases of power nowadays. Australia was left alone when a nuclear incident went horribly wrong and threatened the existence of human population there.
Like South-America and southern Africa, Australia is one of the larger parts where wildlife still thrives. Due to changes in climate, many forests now dot the ground of the former deserts. Ayer's Rock is used as a symbol for the survival of nature, with its many forests. To the north, there is China, an industrial metropolis and one of the largest known human bases on Earth.
Great Desert borders Europe and China, and to the east lays the sea. On the other side is the industrial region of Japan, which still retains its natural regions in Hokkaido. Other parts have become largely polluted by human actions. Tokyo Metropolis is one of the largest known cities, the others being Central Hold City at the borders of former Germany and France, and New York Metropolis.
Northern parts of Earth have become a "superfreeze sector", which houses multiple mining operations. A mysterious mineral, Artanum, is mainly dug from there. It holds many properties; the most exploited being its capabilities as energy source. Many scientists believe it to be "an alien substance", probably with a long history.
Following its foundation, development of technology advanced drastically, giving rise to new forms of weaponry, ships, mechanisms and data processing. Internet grew into a large planet-wide datasphere, mecha suits became more effective and required smaller space to work efficiently, alongside cars came the hovercraft ships, artificial intelligences were born, and energy problems were cut when new converter machines were developed to suit the exotic patterns of artanum structure. New Age of Technology had begun...

Aside EDU, there are still many other organizations, some being vassals, some enemies. Many rumors among the higher-ups of EDU tell the tale of a secret organization, a one governing the world in shadows. This “Order of Phyrecai” is only a rumor and stuff of conspiracy stories and myth tells it was formed by a man called Phyreios; the one, who according to the myth “heard the voices of the gods and met them”. Early followers of Phyrecai supposedly were the members of the cult of Aubnir, the enigmatic god of knowledge and secrets. Its main goal was to act in secret; to balance, to observe, to spectate. Only one question remains: is it a myth or a real thing...?
Meanwhile the mankind adapts to its new environments, a secretive movement has begun to move, slowly but becoming ever faster and the secrets are beginning to reveal...
Beneath the everyday surface a greater force has finally arrived to Earth. Calling themselves the Reign, these mysterious artificial beings of unknown origin have decided to cope with some of the more secretive parties of the Earth, but to what end? Who knows…?

[evereternal7]

sci-fi mystery genre
sounds interesting, I would definitely read/watch this

[Snyser]

cool nice plot

[Darkchao45]

Yeah good stuff.

[zx9racer]

i like this.. sounds good

[vanteya37]

So do I. You should write this. It made me have hope for the sci-fi genre

[halodude23]

maybe ill watch it

[Ace7X]

fuck I read it all

sounds like CC: Tiberium Wars , freemasons , n God's Army Resistance

if ya want to make it animanga, add more "special elements".

more mech, tsundere,hikikomori, things people like, etc

[RinVonStark]

Originally Posted by Ace7X

sounds like CC: Tiberium Wars , freemasons , n God's Army Resistance

Fucking hell, I agree with this jewbot!! The day has come when I grab a large pointy stick a ram it through my skull.

*Looks at the comments* As always, I'll be the only one who will say the bloody truth.

I'll divide my post into parts:

It's the year 2159. The world is no longer the same as the way of technology has carved its way towards the future... nowadays, the world that once was is lost. Nations of Earth have formed a single administrative organ, called EDU (Earth Defensive Union), shortened as "the Union". The Union oversees the smaller governments in different nations, while maintaining an iron grip on power.

Big, all-powerful organization: Shinra.... Umbrella.... Best Korea.... 4chan.... Starbucks (you'll see when you're drinking your quad venti five and a half pump vanilla non-fat 140 degree extra foamy latte and then one day an alien comes out of the cup and makes babies with your ear).

Can't say I disagree with you there. But, unless you want that organization to be evil, don't name it "the Union". Too ominous.

Funny enough, the Union in my novel is actually a terrorist faction.

The landscape has changed. Large portions of Europe have become a polluted wasteland, where large metropolises dot the ground. United States are also mainly polluted due to the drastic rise of population and industry. South-America and southern parts of Africa were abandoned due to an unknown incident... they are havens for wildlife now.

So.... people leave niggerland for no reason and then it ends up with lots of animals and nobody tries to get it back? With the rest of the world filled with crap, I think I'd buy some land there and build a resort and casino. Then I'd start killing all wildlife for kicks. Think this through.

Northern Africa and Arabian Peninsula are scarred due to the years of constant warfare, and remain widely uninhabitable and abandoned.

You racist fuck. Just like in real life. Good show! No, really, too obvious.

Scavengers and small organizations use it for their bases of power nowadays.

Damn you enemies of democracy!!! (See above)

Australia was left alone when a nuclear incident went horribly wrong and threatened the existence of human population there.

There was a film about the world being aholed by nukular assplosions and radiation. Australia was the last to be affected. At least they died first here. HA!

Dude, if you want to get rid of a continent, don't say "BOMB FUCKED IT". Bad plot making. Think it through. unless, of course, you want ghouls. But dude, ghouls are yucky, Fallout taught us that.

Like South-America and southern Africa, Australia is one of the larger parts where wildlife still thrives.

Wait, what? Ah, radiation, here I was, thinking only cockroaches survived your deadly embrace. That, and /b/. No chemo for those fags.

Due to changes in climate, many forests now dot the ground of the former deserts. Ayer's Rock is used as a symbol for the survival of nature, with its many forests.

MOTHERFUCKING SEE ABOVE! Think it through.

To the north, there is China,

Lemme check the map...... Can't find one, I'll have to trust you on this one.

an industrial metropolis and one of the largest known human bases on Earth.

Just like real life! Except now they have buildings.... in their own country, rather than all around the world!!

Great Desert borders Europe and China, and to the east lays the sea.

Great Desert? You mean Russia? Russia is a desert? Those commies really fucked up O.O

On the other side is the industrial region of Japan, which still retains its natural regions in Hokkaido.

Japan is a paradise..... Duuuuuuude! If you want this to sell just in Japan, do this. If you want it to sell everywhere else, think it through. Trust me on this one. Also, +10 for you for not fucking up the only place in Japan I'd like to visit.

Other parts have become largely polluted by human actions. Tokyo Metropolis is one of the largest known cities, the others being Central Hold City at the borders of former Germany and France, and New York Metropolis.

..... Your CHC is like my Trinity, except that Trinity is located a bit more to the east. But tell me the truth: did you name it CHC cause you thought it would be cool OR cause you don't know the name of any european cities? -.- Lurk moar.

Northern parts of Earth have become a "superfreeze sector", which houses multiple mining operations.

Really? The world is filled with pollution, global warming is through the roof, lots of radiation and you kick logic in the nuts and say "FUCK THIS SHIT, I WANT ICE!" You doin it wrong, brah. Think it through.

A mysterious mineral, Artanum, is mainly dug from there. It holds many properties; the most exploited being its capabilities as energy source.

You mean Mako? Yeah, that's cool. Dude, don't come up with random minerals for the sake of plot. Unless you say it's magical.... is it? -.-

Many scientists believe it to be "an alien substance", probably with a long history.
Following its foundation, development of technology advanced drastically, giving rise to new forms of weaponry, ships, mechanisms and data processing. Internet grew into a large planet-wide datasphere, mecha suits became more effective and required smaller space to work efficiently, alongside cars came the hovercraft ships, artificial intelligences were born, and energy problems were cut when new converter machines were developed to suit the exotic patterns of artanum structure. New Age of Technology had begun...

Pulling a random shit out of your ass and saying "AND NOW WE HAVE TITANS, POWER ARMOUR, BOLTGUNS, THE ASTRONOMICAN, EXTERMINATUS AND THE INTERNET IS NOW REAL LIFE (DIAMONDS!)" isn't plot making. Think smart and simple. That's my advice. one mineral doesn't change anything. And no, it's not magical. Unless it is. -.-

Aside EDU, there are still many other organizations, some being vassals, some enemies.

More *chans? OMFG RUN!

Many rumors among the higher-ups of EDU tell the tale of a secret organization, a one governing the world in shadows. This “Order of Phyrecai

You suck at names.... Phyreios? What is this?!?! D&D?

Good show, an Order. Also have an Order. It's the most powerful faction, though. Only one with aircraft support, at least.

is only a rumor and stuff of conspiracy stories and myth tells it was formed by a man called Phyreios; the one, who according to the myth “heard the voices of the gods and met them”. Early followers of Phyrecai supposedly were the members of the cult of Aubnir, the enigmatic god of knowledge and secrets.

lolwut?

Its main goal was to act in secret; to balance, to observe, to spectate.

Oh, like Anonymous? -.-

That sounds alot like the Bookmen from DGM.

Only one question remains: is it a myth or a real thing...?

I think I know the answer to that one =3

Meanwhile the mankind adapts to its new environments, a secretive movement has begun to move, slowly but becoming ever faster and the secrets are beginning to reveal...

More secretive than Anonymous?........ B-but....

Beneath the everyday surface a greater force has finally arrived to Earth. Calling themselves the Reign, these mysterious artificial beings of unknown origin have decided to cope with some of the more secretive parties of the Earth, but to what end? Who knows…?

MOTHERFUCKING NECRONS, THERE WE HAVE IT!!


You're stealing most of your tech ideas from Warhammer 40k and the rest from random shows.

Have you really thought everything out?

If you're a novice to writing, you "might" find this useful. Unless you're a total know-it-all fucktard. It's a simple to complex way to create a story. It's a VERY SLOW PROCESS. It's meant for people who want to make a large scale story but keep on making plot-holes fucking everywhere, or using lame ass excuses to cover some up. Just like you. Remember: this is if you intend on writing something for western readers. Japanese faggots don't really care about details, just as long as there are lots of fetishes and stupid magical crap to go around.

First, before you start drawing, writing, masturbating, whatever the fuck you intend to do: create characters; personalities, looks, etc, but no occupations or residences. Characters you'll enjoy writing about. Then create more characters and brainstorm with your buttbuddies about the kind of relationships the new characters have with the previously created ones. Now think about an occupation that would fit both the relationships and the theme. Now think about a birthplace and the place where they currently live, while making sure it fits their occupation, etc. From there, start expanding. You'll have a city or two (low on detail). Now start imagining what a city needs to function (the basics) still with the theme in mind. Start expanding the small companies you created in order for the city to function. think about their relations with other companies, more powerful ones. You'll start having whole countries up and running with believable organizations in no time. Now, do you like the characters you created? No , you don't, cause I tell you not to.

Forget about them. Their purpose was to help you create a believable society, little by little. You'll now have a continent with many little companies and large ones too. Just start expanding again, from there.

[RinVonStark]

Congratulations, you have a world now. DELETE IT. What you just created was also simply something that will teach you that things need to make sense. You can't have random freeze zones when the earth is scorching hot. Also, if there are natural paradises, you can't just say that they are inhabited, cause it would make no fucking sense either. If you did what I told you to do you've became a better, smarter person. You'll probably see your story with different eyes now and will most likely change a few things here and there.

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