[Risuzu]

Since Dura is taking forever and we have enough competitors...

Poetry Of The Week #7

This weeks theme: Freestyle

Voting rules:
You can only vote on one entry.
Voting for yourself is not allowed. Doing so will result in you being Disqualified.

Explaining your votes is much appreciated!!

Voting will end Sunday ... 13/6/2010

ENTRIES:

Entry 01 - liquidfreedom88:

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The Sea of The Land

as i walk in this unsettled feeling,
the crowds keep moving here and there, unstoppable by the unreverseable moment
who are they? where they go? why they look so hasty? what makes them move?
i look at my sides as i reach the split current. will i be okay this way? or that way?
the crowds keep moving without notice any of my sounds.

i have walked in one of it even before i notice it
thus i see this wall blocking the way
some of the crowds jump off through it, some try to jump through but fall in many ways,
some stop without moving a pinch, some trying but stop midway and goes around.

can i do it? i tried once but as expected fall by the unreachable height
i try and try again but the same result. why? whats wrong?
why did i choose this current?

in the middle of agony i see a small path, unseen by crowds but definitely a path
i go through this small, flowing out strong wave
for i know i can go through this i grip on a sturdy rod and move forward

Entry 02 - Baka Baka:

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I am walking
Walking in a land lost in time
Walking, with no memories
Walking, with a sword in my hand

I do not know the reason why I was born
I do not know the reason why I was here
I do not know what my role should be, in this rotten world
I do not know anything

I walk on and on
Through the never ending road that leads to nowhere

Encountering monsters on the way is so normal
That it can be described as trees on the road side
I swing my sword
Not sure how
Not sure why
But it looks like my body knows the way to use a sword

Walking and walking
Is all that I do
I don't know where it will lead
But I do know that it leads to somewhere

Walking and walking
I saw a village
People were injured
Monsters attacking

Then it hit me
I know why I was born
I know why I was here
I know why there's a sword in my hand
It's all there, to protect the people I love and care for
I thought as I charged into the pack of monsters

Entry 03 - Avamo:

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I see through the darkness of the night,
unseen ghosts which gave me strange delight,
they whispered as i crept closer to them,
their voices, a gentle chorus of doom

"what is your purpose" they ask of the mortal,
wandering in their realm, devoid of a purpose,
i hear myself reply as if a stranger spoke from within,
"To forget all my pain, to be loved even if it is vain"

the spirits , they smile and hold open their arms,
they offer me a path, one with no thorns,
foolishly trudges this mortal along this path,
his existence vanishes, his memory is gone.

Entry 04 - evereternal7:

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5 AM

Sitting here sensing the chilly floor
I feel the icy air embracing me
Looking blankly at the screen in front
My hands feel cold

I reach for my cup of hot chocolate
A burning sensation enters my fingers
The sweet steamy smell I inhale
My throat feels warm

I reach for the keyboard and start typing
My eyes barely making out the text
I notice WsE voiding my thread
I want to rage

I feel fatigue throughout my body
My brain starts abandoning me
My will to stay awake starts fading
I go to bed

Entry 05 - Risuzu:

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Live for me, Try for me
You shall never try to flee
Break for me, Die for me
Lick my boots with glee

Fall into the deepest despair
Bleed and scream in agony
Realize that I don't care
I don't love you, but you love me

Entry 06 - Aphrodite:

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The clock’s vowels ring out nine vibrantly
Lavender scarves circling wrists
Ripped red purple pearls, thighs too thin for him
Green jewels in her ears, brown hair in twists and falls
Whipped around like a horse's tail, a wildfire
Pinned back like all the class you can have
A pin, a key artifact is breaking
Fingers bent against the wall clasp and release
Face digging in his back hidden from the elements, the tormentors
Expressionless expression hiding a locked puzzle
Flat like a painting, glassy like the moon, smooth around the edges
Only the lips tell the truth, the eyes a double mask
Hands pinching the air sweat little wet beads
No tears, only shame walking into the wind’s rumors

[Baka Baka]

I can totally relate to Ever's one. The onli thing is it isn't 5am for mi, and WsE didn't rape my thread. xD

Well done! :3

[iggi]

i don't generally read poetry, much less when i'm tired. I'll read these later and try my best to choose one fairly, bc if i vote at this time, id probably go with the shortest or easiest one to understand x.x

wow there is something about Aphrodites, its way over my head o.o
i really like the images the poem paints in my head, i think i'm going to have to vote for entry 06.
Lavender scarves circling wrists/
...Green jewels in her ears, brown hair
"Ripped red purple pearls," <-i forgot the term for this kind of sound pattern but i like it ^^

very nice poem.
still too weary to understand it all but i think im going to stick with this one.

2nd: Avamo entry #3

- Try to avoid double posting -

[iGneusX]

goes with evereternal with this one :3

[dukehiruma]

Aphrodite entry..
have a deep meaning in my life =3

[Duratrix]

Thx for putting the thread up. ^_^

Nice entries btw.

[Fatentity]

Originally Posted by Everenternal

My eyes barely making out the text
I notice WsE voiding my thread
I want to rage

Ever Wins. Seriously though, same reason as Baka Baka, I can relate to it, lol.

I really liked your poem though too Avamo. Good job.

[Duratrix]

Congratulations evereternal7!!

Please give the theme for the next potw.