[Duratrix]

SSOTM #4 Voting Thread
Hehe, the voting thread is finally up!!

This ssotm's genre + theme: Adventure || Freestyle

Start voting on the best story!! ^^
Please give a brief explanation for your vote.
It is not necessary, but it is appreciated.

You can't vote for yourself. Voting for yourself will lead to a disqualification of your entry.
The entries are compressed as zip files, so when you click the link... you'll download them. Read them and vote.

Have fun reading and vote for the best one!

Voting will end Sunday (14th of march 2010)


You can read the texts online, click on this link: N/A

ENTRIES:
Entry 01:
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Entry 02:
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Entry 03:
> Attachment 599 <

Entry 04:
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Entry 05: Disqualified - Reason: Too short!!
(Sorry, it is a good story though.)
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Batch file - (Contains all entries)
> ssotm04-All_Entries.zip <




Ps. Sorry, seems my story will continue on the next ssotm... Blame school!!! =P

[Fatentity]

My vote: I'm voting for #2. (Instead of #3). Though I loved #3, but to be fair to others it doesn't meet the required genre in my opinion. #2 and #1 do this, #5 might have but it was too short to tell. (Make it longer! I'd love to read it! =] )

Entry 05 - Sadistically good. I love it. Unfortunately it's very short, but I like the details and the dark side too it. Something about it that's some-what captivating, making you ask for more. So that's why you don't get my vote, you didn't satisfy my needs for MORE! I love your style though, your use of words and descriptions, and the type of story, if you write more of this kind of thing, I will definitely read it.

Entry 03 - Even after reading just the first paragraph I was blown away and already knew this would be the winner. Splendidly done and a tale well told, I hope I can write as well as you in due time. It felt like something out of the bible or an actual published tale. For what it was telling it was perfect in every aspect (except one) in starting with the main characters, getting to the point, and a swift end. All the while portraying biblical lessons. The only problem I had was the words One Soul used when speaking to Lucifer, it seemed of just pure ranting anger, I felt you could have written something more...profound(?). None-the-less fantastic job!

Entry 02 - I know you asked for constructive criticism, but I really don't have much to add. Overall, it was good. I would say some more back ground info would be nice, but it was a Short Story, so that's to be expected. Mainly though only things I could recommend that weren't related to the story would just polish up your writing skills a little more and that's it. For a first time it was good! *First time for me too! * <3. I look forward on your improvements to your next story!

Entry 01 - I am sourly lost, maybe because it's 2am or it was from D&D. It seems good, but I'm not sure, I think it's because I was a tad confused at first with what was going on. Needs a little bit more info on what's happening, or at the very least who the man telling the story is talking to or where they are at. That part of your story was confusing for me, so your only problem is needing more info for the reader. As for the story the man tells it's quite good, and the ending is rather comedic =]. I liked the part where he's flying through the sky being shot at his own men screaming "Don't SHOOT!" LoL! . If we ever have a comedy genre SSOTM, I'm sure yours will truly be one of my favorites!

Big HUGS to you Dura for all your work!

[TTally]

This is actually hard this time around.

#2- Hello, Kingdom Hearts reference! I saw that and did a little fan girl squeal. All in all I really enjoyed it! Very nice job. Like it's been mentioned before a little previous history would have saved me from playing a guessing game in some spots- but that's about all.

#3 Besides a few grammar errors i noticed right off the bat (maybe I've been editing too much lately) I enjoyed this one probably the most. I would like to vote for it, but I feel like it dosent quite fit 'Adventure' all that well.

#4 .... Holy monkey balls. 25 pages- you WIN! Lol I will have to admit I didn't get through this whole story- I know it's not fair- but my limited time, attention span, and language skills got the best of me. What I DID read was top notch though!

#5- I had the different issue with this from number 5. It was too short and a tad too jumbled for me to read in spots, but I thought it was wonderfully written.

So what one did I vote for? Let me finish #4 and then I'll vote.

Dura- kick my butt if I forget to vote

[Yellow]

Entry 1- You have potential to become better. I like how descriptive but I think you could probably do better. Your heading in the right direction and know what your doing. now you just need to enhance, improve and step it up a bit. For example your like in level 5 now but I think you can reach level 7 with more practice. But good work.

entry 2- Interesting..Basically my thoughts are the same as Fatentity. overall good just working on your writing skills. Tally said something about Kingdom heart, although i don't know what thats about Hopefully you only took the name idea and not story idea lol Well anyways it was good and much better then my work when it was my first attempt. so basically my thoughts are the same as entry one, you have potential to do better.

Entry 5- sorry but to short, although good.

Entry 4- It's good actually but sorta Lengthy for a short story. What I read was great, but I didn't read the whole thing. So because of that i can't vote on it since I believe something gets the vote if you actually read the whole thing. the goal with lengthy writing is to keeps the readers attention all the way through and that can be hard but next time keep it shorter, for a short story contest

Entry 3-as far as writing skills (besides entry4, it showed great writing but like I said, i didn't finish it so i can't vote for it) this one showed the most out of the entries. Although it's not the BEST example of adventure it's sorta of related. The main character is going a distance to be successful in it's goal. Descriptions were vivid, and it had a bit of meaningful stuff in the story

so therefore I will not be voting in this competition.

[Duratrix]

Entry #4 gets my vote.
I enjoyed reading it, but try keeping it a little bit shorter.

- Voting ended -
Too bad for the small amount of votes though.
The winner is... Fatentity

Congratulations!!