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lurklurklurk
Join Date: Jan 2010
Location: La La Land
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My script im writting what you think of it? -
02-18-2010, 04:00 PM
WARNING THIS IS SERIOUSLY FUCKED UP IF YOU DON'T LIKE TWISTED STUFF PLEASE DON'T READ THIS
Now that's out of the way here is my story im writing just wanted to see what people think of it, ive only done a few scenes so it shouldn't take long to read, also I done it in word pad so its riddled with spelling mistakes please don't take notice of them will fix it soon Thank you please  Opening Scene - Set in Alex's room... Alex is on the computer reading an email telling him that his girlfriend is cheating on him and finds the whole thing rather funny as she is sending him pictures of the guy's penis with the caption that reads "Wish you were him?" Sometimes I find things in life that upset me to a point were I feel like I can't go on... This was one of those times were you believe everything in life to be absolutely magical... floating on air..... and suddenly it all falls on you like a piano in a dodgy 80's cartoon. Were has the happiness gone? [flash back to happy times in Alex's life, partys, kisses and cumshots] Is this really all there is to it? Am I missing something? *Alex googles the word happiness Results 1 - 10 of about 58,300,000 for happiness* Fishing threw that would be like trying to finger a dry granny... lets try.... *Alex googles "The map to Happiness"* *Are you seeking a different world? One were your girlfriend never cheats on you? Are you Googling the word Happiness aimlessly? Click here now!* Erie stuff... click! [A web page opens up and gives instructions on how to enter the mythical land of yonder, "All you have to do is put your finger in your bum before you go to sleep and chant "Pitch and toss, dishes washed, unhappy as fuck, give me some luck"] Alex laughs at the absurdity of the content after reading the chant out Ah that made me happy reading that guess that was the trick.... speaking of bed [Alex lays in bed still thinking about the chant, almost convincing himself that it could work before dismissing the matter] Scene 2 - Open forest clearing Puss - Excuse me ya filthy rat burglar, what are you doin on my lawn? you looking for a taste of my paw? you grisly looking cu... *important note - puss sounds like captain quint from the movie Jaws [Alex wakes up to see the fairytale creature puss in boots standing over him and jumps up] Alex - What the fuck!? Ah im still sleeping... this must be my mind playing tric.. [Puss pulls out a rapier and puts it to Alex's throat] Puss - You'll be going for a long sleep if you don't explain yourself... I'll ask you one more time.. what are you doin on ma lawn? [Alex realizes the seriousness of the situation and quickly starts to panic] Alex - Were am I? Puss - Your on my lawn, and im the kind that loves..... dishin out slaps [Puss's claws start to appear from behind his paw] Alex - Is this the place with the map to happiness? Puss - Ah see your a lunatic, well we dont be likin the coo coo nest bombs gettin too close to the whiskers.. gona have ta get my rusty knife and put you down slow ya see? Alex - Wait! Is this the land of Yonder? Puss - Aye tis, where else could it be? Alex - Are you aware of the planet earth? Puss- Ther ya go gain talkin the lunatic soup with your mouth full Alex - May I ask your name? Are you Puss in boots by any chance? Puss - Aye they call me puss in boots cos i be upte my knees in pussy [Puss sheaths his rapier... stands proud, arms at hips with the sun at his back] Puss - are you looking my seed for your Cat? I charge for it tho... wont be doin ya any favours ya hear? Dont care if she has two tails ya see? Alex - No, Your a character in a fairytale book for children were im from... I guess the person who wrote it has been to yonder aswell Puss - Ah now I know yee bee lien, they would execute someone for telling my tails to children... you shouldnt be readin stories of puss havin sex to young ones ya see? Alex - Well in the book there is no mention of sex.. to be honest im quite shocked tha... Puss - What!? This person who be writin tales of puss must be mistakin me fer someone else ya hear? [Puss gets angry and starts to reach for his rapier] Alex - Ok ok, your right.. calm yourself Puss ...or.... erm... Mr Boots please Puss - Just Puss ya hear? What brings ya to the land of Yonder? We dont like trouble makers ya see? And im the boss around here ya hear? Alex - Yes I see and I hear... perfectly... no need to keep repeating it Puss my friend. Like I said I don't know how I got here but Im searching for The Map to Happiness. Puss - Happiness? Are you not comfortable in your own fur? I don't know of any Map that cures the big girl inside a man ya hear? But I know of a fella that might know bout such things could take you to him but your mind might be lost in the trip ya see? Alex - What do you mean? Puss - Hes a strange one ya see? Worse than you ya hear? Alex - Take me too him I need to find this map so I can go home Puss - Ah well if ye insist ill take ya but come cryin to Puss when your right paw has been burnt and yer mind starts to think bout stuff that ill scar yee ya hear? Scene 3 - On a Hill surrounded by sheep Bo-PeeP *important note.. Is a man in typical boopeep atire (drag queen) Talks like the imagination guy from south park Bo-Peep *singing under an umbrella in the sun* *note this song is sang in the melody of the dango song from clannad Shagging Sheep, Shearing Sheep Shagging Sheep, Shearing Sheep Shagging Sheep, Shearing Sheep Shagging and Shearing all the Sheep Shagging sheep... with... my... macho macho Shagging sheep with my... maAaacchhoooo Little Lamb sheep loves to play with my macho macho Loves to suck my ma...aaa... cho All the Sheep love to get naked and shagged by me boooOOOO PeeeeeP All the sheep love my macho all the time life and lving Under my unbrella were no one can see me Shagging sheep all day-long Shagging Sheep, Shearing Sheep Shagging Sheep, Shearing Sheep Shagging Sheep, Shearing Sheep All the sheep and me one big happy family -------------------------------------------------------------------------- Whatcha think?  |
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lurklurklurk
Join Date: Jan 2010
Location: La La Land
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02-18-2010, 09:30 PM
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lurklurklurk
Join Date: Jan 2010
Location: La La Land
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02-18-2010, 10:12 PM
Thanks for your input
 I wanted to make the first meeting with Puss a bit longer but it would have wore thin very quickly... The first scene would take a lot longer if it was played out properly it would drag on for a bit.I don't know what im trying to accomplish with it to be honest, I just started writing for the fun of it and made it up as I went along though it will probably just be for my friends to read |
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