[Duratrix]

Potw #2 voting thread
Wooooot!! Amount of entries + 1! ^^

This weeks theme: Negative Emotions

Voting rules:
You can only vote on one entry.
Voting for yourself is not allowed. Doing so will result in you being Disqualified.

Explaining your votes is much appreciated!!

Voting will end Sunday (?)

ENTRIES:

Entry 01 - Avamo:

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This nightmare of hatred,
this never ending darkness,
relays to me,
a message of sadness

i see before me,
the dawn of a day,
when man turns on man,
and their spirits decay

this scene of great sorrow,
displays no tomorrow,
says a ghost to me,
the ghost of humanity.

Entry 02 - Purple:

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That depressed feeling of melancholy descends upon me.
I gaze upon the velvet rose which I see
In an allegorical sense it depicts my life.
Oh, the many ways it portrays my strife.

The beautiful petals, that alluring red.
like, in today's dystopia, the innumerous blood shed
every minute, hour and day though hidden
the secrets of the world; forbidden.

The sweet scent, equivalent to that dreamland.
that distant, allusive, unapproachable, unobtainable land.
I envy it, loathe it, hate it, from the bottom of my heart.
Just like life itself; tearing me apart

Finally the thorns, the source of agony,
pain, suffering, torture, woe and misery.
That fills my life.

Survival of the fittest, the weak are devoured.
Killed to become food for those empowered.
It's time for my departure, my fate draws nigh.
To be slaughtered; for a mere animal am I.

Entry 03 - Risuzu:

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How far do we go back?
When did out time begin?
We didn't know how to sin,
But we did know how to grin.
How much did we truly lack?

I know how we have drifted;
Sailed onto this open sea.
We set sail with such glee,
And we let ourseleves go free.
But it has all been destoyed.

We sail on a sea of blood;
Sailing on the essence of life.
It drains so slowly off a knife;
I see it from the growing strife.
The mainland will see a flood.

We sailed together for days,
Those days became so long.
I grew tired of your song,
And your yearning for one who is brawn.
I suppose such yearning never pays.

His blood flowed so, as if his body full.
I watched as it coated the floor,
I watched as it reached the door,
And I watched as I made him only gore.
Your blood is so much more beautiful.

So how did this truly begin?
It came when we entered the sea of love,
And it ended when we entered into strife.
With the epilogue in blood being drawn;
Truly, I find your head by itself wonderful...

Entry 04 - Duratrix:

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I hated you for being so good.
Couldn't resist the hunger.
Now my hands are full of your blood.

I hated myself for not holding back.
Even without much anger,
your body suddenly said 'crack'.

I hated the world,
for making you so tender.
How could I not withhold?

And now you're gone...
But I'll keep you inside of me,
My dear sandwich I ate at dawn.

Entry 05 - TsubasaKai:

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An emotion
Flickers across a familiar face
I disconnect
So I won’t have to feel their pain
A moment
As they tell me about the break up
It’s stupid
I’m thinking already of going home
A pause
As they wait for my response
“So what”
Is my only reply to their strife
I leave
Because it’s not my place to say
I think
Everyone should make their own mistakes
At night
I sit alone thinking to myself
How perfect
This solitude I built around me
No one
Seems to penetrate the walls I build
I reflect
With two words I secure my loneliness

[Risuzu]

#2, just because for now. I'll give a better reason when I'm not half-asleep.

[cotsiost]

#1, just because it was simple and good for me but all the rest were good as well so everybody keep up the good work

[FenRirFX]

#4 cuz made me smile :-)

[Anoody]

Voted for 3

[imSOecchi]

Number 5 because it relates to something going on with me at the moment

[Fatentity]

#2 Gets my vote.


#1 Seemed more "Sad" than "Negative" to me. Good writing though! Just the wrong direction.

#2....wow you have talent. But how did you go from being a Rose to an Animal? Great depiction of emotion though!

#3 Was remarkable as well. I also think you got the "negative" emotions down. Sadly...not being good at poetry myself, I had a hard time understanding what you were talking about. If I actually had enough poetical insight (omg that's a word...) to understand, I think I would've picked yours. But I can not vote for something I can not understand, it would seem unfair to me. Great job non-the-less!

@ #4 (Duratrix) LoL! Nice poem. Short, but not quite "negative" more like "Twisted". But I liked it . Very much so.

Pfft, only 1 of the people who entered, posted? Fail participation.

#5 That was good. But I feel you could do more...go deeper with the emotions. I understood where the view point of the person was coming from, but I felt I could not connect with the person on a more personal level. I think you could do much better though, try and let more emotion out. Then again it was a poem about one's personal "Solitude" so... but I think you understand where I am coming from. You need more....nr....if only I was good with words....then I feel the readers would connect oh so much more, giving a fantastic poem I believe you are capable of. Keep up the work!
I also liked the structure of your poem. (Line, two words, line, two words, etc).

# 2 & # 3 are my favorites. I am tempted to vote for #3 simply because he/she actually posted, and for #2 too!

I also feel #3 just feels...unfinished to me. Either from craving more, or feeling it ended too soon. I really liked it though!

[Avamo]

#2 gets my vote cause it is written better than other entries. also has good use of words and a good theme too.

[Retrorock]

Why does most of them seem a bit depressing ? No one get my vote this time round I'm afraid.

[Duratrix]

My vote goes to #3.
It's really good.

@Fatentity
About #2 ... the poem is about the animal, it sees itself in a flower (a velvet rose) and explains what the rose has in common with itself. It's all explained quite nicely. ^^

And about my poem. Isn't twisted kinda negative? xD


Anyway really nice poems everyone. Keep it up.