[RinVonStark]

Meh, since TitsTally took the liberty of voting for herself, I'll do the same thing....
*votes*
And now to get permabanned!!!

[TTally]

Originally Posted by Duratrix

Please give a brief explanation for your vote.
It is not necessary, but it is appreciated.

I notice a lack of this. Sadness.

EDIT: >.< TittsTally..... actually.... Been called that a few times. lol

[Anna-san]

I read Rin's.
Very, very good! I voted for his.
It's actually based on characters he's created, not off some random anime!
Yay for your creativity.

[Darkchao45]

I voted for mi amigo de Portugal =D
TTally's was good but.....

[azn]

Sigh... They both were good reads.
But I prefer dialogue so I'd vote Rin

[High Life]

Originally Posted by aznkidxD

Sigh... They both were good reads.
But I prefer dialogue so I'd vote Rin

thats where we diff then

anyone can write words- i am right now

but it takes skill to write a story with actual discriptions that you can see

tal i voted for you

[professional party person]

Originally Posted by High Life

thats where we diff then

anyone can write words- i am right now

but it takes skill to write a story with actual discriptions that you can see

tal i voted for you

Tempted to agree. However- I think of these two got together to co-write one it would be very good. TTally has a very good sense at discribing things- but lacks on dialouge. RinVonStark can write pretty good dialouge, but lacks in discriptions.

Not sure who to vote for yet.

[RinVonStark]

Thx darkchao and aznkid. Any tips on how to make it better? Cause that's the main purpose of me participating.

High Life, don't worry, I have plenty descriptions on the main piece but I posted a dialogue cause, like many people, I find the descriptions boring. Also, Adrian's room is described before the flashback. As of descriptions inside the flashbacks; only the main Rin/Myra ones have full-fledged ones since it's really mandatory cause they will help the reader when it comes to comparing their previously rich life style with the misery they "live" in in the present.

[High Life]

if they run on and on their boring you just gotta find that perfect (hard to reach) balence fo the two. AKA- no JRR Tolkien please- GOD i hated his books. at the same time though i dont was a 12 year old fangirl's IM chat log either.

most of the time i was seeing the only thing i could think of- not what u wanted. no idea really what people looked like- or setting- ("rich life style with the misery" never would have gotten that if u didnt tell me). thats just me though dood- i need it spelled the hell out for me for i trip out into space and miss what u wanted me to gather.

and Pro. Prty Dood- i DO taht would be epic. Tal and Rin make one together but HA i doubt either will alow that.

[RinVonStark]

Sorry, High Life: wut? I'm going to be hostile now and tell you to learn2spell'n'read before I try to figure out what you meant. Also, reread my previous post cause you clearly didn't understand anything of what I said.

PPP, in both my defense and TitsTally's, just because something isn't present doesn't mean the writer doesn't actually know how to do it. In this case, it was just a choice. True, since I find them boring it's way harder for me to milk a good descriptions than an engaging dialogue but, with time, everything can be done.
Next ssotm, maybe it won't be freestyle and we'll be forced to post something entirely different from this.
Also, to douse your expectations: I doubt a duo text would work cause I'm really freaking bossy and Tally doesn't seem to be the type who, let's put it bluntly, kneels and sucks up (no flame intended).