[ZEE]

its some thing i have been messing around with in my free time and now its around 210 pages so i though i post a part of the beginning for the hell of it and to see what the asses here thought of it




Xirick is the younger of the two Lore brothers envious’ of his elder brother's elite status among the knights and warriors of their small kingdom sought to be like him and when he besieged Greashen to let him join the army he was turned down with this statement “There is no need for someone with no skill nor experience in any form of combat or leadership in the army “ he brashly replied “ THEN TRAIN ME!” “Train you? Train you in what?” “ I DON’T CARE ….S.SWORD! Teach me to use a sword.” “ Xirick do you even have a sword for that mater have you even picked up or touched a sword” “ n.no but you can giv…” “ NO! I will not waste valuable resources to make you a sword and equipment for you to break and fix until you get tried of them and through them away especially with the low results the mine has come up with this past 4 moons.” “Then buy me one” “ it’s the same damn problem” usually Xirick would’ve given up by now one of his random ideas realizing this and his persistence in the matter he stated. “ huh tell you what I have to leave to the border with some knights to settle some issue in the farming and fishing village Viridiansalt I swear such a stupid name but any ways it’s a 3 moon journey there and ill probably have to come back because some idiot asked the army for help to kill wolves so after that ill come back.” “So what I want you to do is to find work here and if you have enough or have worked hard enough ill buy you a appropriate sword for combat training and ill teach you.”

[Geo69]

I don't like Xirick.he's a prick

[ZEE]

lol he does become a big one yea

[Geo69]

so where is the next part?

[TTally]

i have issues with capitalization and formatting. .. .

[Janey-chan]

I like this actually
I think you're very creative and I'm deffinitely waiting for the next part
So please post it fast!

[Omgzors]

ZEE, you've got to like, make it so that it's grammatically correct or else it burns my eyes. D:
But yeah, go post more. I can't write anything well at all so kudos to something that'd own any of my stories.