[Rikimaru1]

My Subduer of Nature

Deadly features my heart rend,
Yet mend me each more severe :
Bleach marble is not my end,
Your whiter arms are my tomb, dear;
Embraced I to no sky ascend,
Your blue eyes are fairer, and nearer,
And no sunrays to me extend,
Your golden hairs have no peer...
No swallowing oceans I descend,
Much I'm used to your tears sear;
To chase the kisses far you send,
To bend and rend wherever they steer.
Desert storms my fore may blind,
But lose to you whispering my ear;
Not a human kens my mind,
that only your touch can clear;
An aura defines all that's kind,
Does all clouds above you blear;
Both your beauty eternally entwined:
Me and nature,once feared, now endeared;
For your death left but eternal death to find,
And silence that's unspoken drear.



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1- the title is a pun.
3- The poem is highly symbolic.
4- the alliteration is evident, but the conceit, is not easy to grasp.

[Sid Greene]

Another poet has been born in AT. Pleased to meet you and your thoughts that lies in your words. It's not easy to digest everything in poetry but everything has to be chewed first. Thank you for sharing and please do write some more. I am looking forward to more of your works.

[Apathy compleX]

Hey bro, I know it is ridiculous to post here, since I see you everyday in the real life, and you actually got banned from entering Animetake.com, but I have to say : Now I understand what you mean by "artistic hypocrisy".

[AnimeReference]

imo the rhyming was a little excessive/forced

[0abondoned]

I never was good at understanding English lyrics.

[aimiko63]

Originally Posted by Sid Greene

Another poet has been born in AT.

^right!

nice poem.. though I can't fully understand some lines (i'm not good in english ).. i think the arrangement of the words are quite different from the usual arrangement but I think that is good