[MR Rayne]

Le story:

I just wanted to be a badass!

NO. Please stop.
Were the words that the girl cried out.
But my friends and I did not listen to here.
We continued to proceed. We continued to rape the girl.

My friends and I. We are the local tough guys.
But you cannot be a tough guy if you are not a member of a gang.
So we made a plan to join the biggest gang in Amsterdam .
The only way to get in as a member is to perform a heinous act, film it and send it to one of the gang leaders.
So we started plotting.
Eventually we had an idea of raping someone.
Why do something if you cannot enjoy it.

No. Please stop.
Were the words that the girl cried.
But my friends and I did not listen to her.
We continued to proceed. We continued to rape the girl.
My friends had kidnapped her and put a bag over her head because they thought it would look more badass.
We filmed it in turns because everyone wanted to have a little fun.
But something did not feel right. I felt that this was no ordinary girl.
That is what my feelings told me but I continued.
I could not stop. This sensation. The good feeling overwhelmed my conscience.
Every time the girl scream stop. We went further, harder and faster.
The cries of the girl exceeded our laughter, but only made it worse.
The more she screamed the more we got excited.

When everything was over it was time to clean up the evidence.
Leave no trace and because I had did not join with the abduction.
It was my job to pull the trigger.
So I grabbed the gun and pushed it against her head. she knew immediately what was wrong and begged me not to kill her.
You could see her tears dripping from the bag that we had put over her head.
She said something, but I ignored her very last words, and pulled the trigger.

The adrenaline flowed through my body was wonderful.
I wanted to see. I wanted the face of the one I had killed.
So when I would see her on the news.
I would get the same wonderful feeling.
When I put my hand on the bag and pulled it off there was a dead silence.
My gun fell from my hand.
The blow from the gun against the ground broke the silence.
And I shouted the name of my sister whom I ignored the last words.
Please, I have a little brother for whom i have to take care of.

Le poém :

The emotion !

The world with a fake smile.
Makes my living worth while.
Seeing people looking for love.
I crush it from above.
Sorrow makes me stronger.
happiness makes me weak.
Dissapointment on your face.
It's me who you can embrace.
People love the sun, but I love the rain.
Let me introduce myself, my name is pain.

[the space cadet]

These are shitty.

[MR Rayne]

At least i didn't give you any hope of it being good ^^

[Sid Greene]

Your honest WB and please write some more. I started from scratch before but perseverance can get good results. Interesting.

[0abondoned]

My eyes... BURNED. btw
But my friends and I did not listen to here.
isn't that suppose to be "I did not listen to her"?

[Rush]

You know?

Your topic title brought me here. And I lol'd.

[sozen]

Beautifully shitty. You sir, Shit excellence.

[Elusive Mind]

I wouldn't say it's shitty, just...um... how you'd say, um, violent i guess. maybe perverted as well. well whatever, besides the topic of choice, i didn't think it was all that bad. I didn't see the ending coming at all. for some strange reason i had it in my mind that the girl was going to be some sort of alien and kill them all or something crappy along those lines, but instead you made it into a decent enough plot. it's not one of my favorites, but it still had some sort of effect on me.

[mexklow]

violins are great when they are stuck in side my ****
roses are **** when spread around in my bed

[Elusive Mind]

^ wow, that was the best review I've ever read. it focuses on the meaning of the story so much. *sob* I'm touched