[chaotix37]

My first poetry. Well Here it goes. Hope you like it..... I think....


My hateful and chaotic life


Life begins after you rest
All I could do was to give my best
You don’t know what will happen today
Hopefully it won't be a dismay

As I meet people, they try to tease
It’s so hard to mingle with them, I’m not at ease
At first why am I misunderstood?
After all I’m not in a good mood.

Why do people sometimes hate me a lot?
Maybe their brains are like a vacant lot.
People around me are really such a pain.
Bad ideas around them are stuck in my brain

As I’m in love with someone I trust
Loyalty is really a must
As I express my feelings to her.
She thinks that I’m a bother

Afterwards I am pissed,
I had a bad feeling that I’m dismissed
I’d rather be happy alone
It’s better for me to go home.

Starting to face a new conflict
Hopefully I won’t inflict
I’m losing now my confidence
I feel that doesn’t make any sense

I realize that I need someone
So that I won’t be lonesome
Even if there’s troubles in me
I should be happy, full of glee

Before I say so long
I’m sorry that my poem is to long
Someday you’ll understand
That we should help hand in hand

EDIT:Correction found.

[aimiko63]

Originally Posted by chaotix37

Why do people sometimes hate me a lot?
Maybe their brains are like a vacant lot.

this may be true hehe.. why would somebody hate you?!
btw, nice poem

[Sid Greene]

Nice poem chaotix and any male can relate to this handsome poem of yours. I miss the male bondings in IRC when I used to chat there.

Well anyways do you think this will be ok if:

You don’t what will happen today
Hopefully you won’t dismay

will be:

You don't know what will happen today
Hopefully it won't be a dismay

dismay is the same as disappointment

Just a thought but then again I like it!
Keep it up! Nice rhyming dude!

[chaotix37]

Originally Posted by Sid Greene

Nice poem chaotix and any male can relate to this handsome poem of yours. I miss the male bondings in IRC when I used to chat there.

Well anyways do you think this will be ok if:

You don’t what will happen today
Hopefully you won’t dismay

will be:

You don't know what will happen today
Hopefully it won't be a dismay

dismay is the same as disappointment

Just a thought but then again I like it!
Keep it up! Nice rhyming dude!

Thanks for the corrections. Really appreciated it
@Aimiko- Probably because of my attitude and my carelessness that's all I could say

[aimiko63]

@chaotix: oh i see. anyway, i DON'T hate you

[simo_keng]

hmm, should try my hands on some angsty poetry as well.

Nice read I personally love poems that rhyme. doesn't matter how the structure is, as long as it rolls off the tongue nicely at the end of each line I'ma lovin it.

that's mainly because I suck at freestyle lol.

moar chaotix! (P.S you're not related to duratrix somehow are you?)

[chaotix37]

Originally Posted by simo_keng

hmm, should try my hands on some angsty poetry as well.

Nice read I personally love poems that rhyme. doesn't matter how the structure is, as long as it rolls off the tongue nicely at the end of each line I'ma lovin it.

that's mainly because I suck at freestyle lol.

moar chaotix! (P.S you're not related to duratrix somehow are you?)

Wish I could. I am moody somehow. Trying to have a next one.
<------point of depression already
NOt related to duratrix.

[simo_keng]

okay I just checked ur sig spoiler LOL. I LOVE IT XD