[NrG]

Title: └Wakaremichi┐ (translated to cross-roads)
Pages: Hopefully 50-60 bi-weekly or monthly
Genre: Action,Adventure, Shounen,Supernatural,martial arts
Synopsis:

Col Fukyuu and Kengo Fukyuu are two brothers traveling to find clues to their past and kill anyone who strps in their way. Col is Kengo's little brother, he might not be as big or strong as his brother but you can say he's the brains of the operation. Kengo is a strong and tough older brother who protects Kengo from anyone trying to hurt them. Only a few know what really happened to the Fukyuu brother's; but that's not going to stop Col and Kengo. Even death itself can't stop them. Or can it? After Kengo falls to his demise Col tries everything in his power to get his brother back, even if it cost him his life.

Character description:
Kengo Fukyuu: 21 years old , 6' 1" and bald. Born Oct. 4. He wears a brown jacket, on his back a large tattoo which says "Fu*K Y*u". Due to his baldness he also wears a white beenie. The iris of his left eye is can be seen at any distance. He drives a a motorcycle he made himself, dubbed "Unbeatable".

Col Fukyuu: 16 years old, Born Jan. 27. Kengo's little brother. The pupil of his right eye is shaped like a crosshair. He has spent most of his time in America with his cousin. He changed his name to Col to fit-in with the Western culture.

Chapters:

Chapter 1: Judgement

*Col is leaning over the unconses Kengo and crying.
Col: Ken! Ken! Don't you leave me!
*Homeless man makes his debut
Old Homeless man: I'm sorry I didn't mean too...
*Col interupts the old man's sentence
Col: Just get outta here old man, before I do something.
Old Homeless man: But I'm sorry.
Col: I said get the **** out of here!
*Old homeless man leaves from the back of the alley
Col: Come on Kengo, don't die on me.
Col: You're supposed to be strong. You're supposed to protect me.
*Transition Panel: 22 Hours Earlier
*Kengo and Col are somewhere near a city. There's a motorcycle in the background.
*Kengo's stomach growls
(WRITERS NOTE: When there's text in appostrophe's the text is a thought)
Kengo: 'I must be starving'
Kengo: Col get over here. See that city over there?
Col: Yea.
Kengo: We need to get some food.
Col: What're we waiting for?
*Kengo and Col get on the motorcycle and bolt toward the city
*Transition to outskirts of city
*Kengo and Col and infront of the city, they see a large sign post in the road that says: Welcome to ... City. The City's name is covered by dirt,rust and grime. Col and Kengo dismount the motorcycle and they leave it near the sign post. Kengo and Col walk around the city and observe people talking and staring. A suspious man hides behind in an alley(not the oldman). A beautiful woman is seen in the distance.
Kengo walks toward her, Col doesn't notice where Kengo goes and starts walking inanother direction.
Kengo: Hey there beautiful. What's a fine lady like yourself doing way out here?
*The woman blushes and large man about 3 times Kengo's size approaches.
Man: What're you doing to my woman?!
*Two bystanders make thier debut
Bystander 1: Not again
Bystander 2: I hope I don't have to did another grave.
Bystander 1: That's the fourth guy this week. Poor shame.
Man: My name's Heinz
(WRITERS NOTE: I couldn't think of a better name. This name is subject to change)
Heinz: I see you've been talking to my lady here, huh?
Kengo: Sorry pal. I didn't know that beaut there was your gal'.
Kengo: Damn shame really, her being with you. A big ugly...
*During the begining of the conversation Heinz was slowly reaching for a pipe nearby. After Heinz hears ugly he swings the pipe recklessly and hits Kengo in his head. His beenie turns red and Kengo drops.
*Transition Panel: Pan to Col who is outside near the village outskirts a distance away from Kengo.
Col: Where the heck is Kengo?


MORE COMING SOON.
Could use a background artist

[digritz]

Ok....so like this is the same post you have at animecrazy and the same one, (don't know if this one's yours too). at one manga.
What is the point? What are you trying to convey in your post? Is it an attempt at a review. Are you just trying yo advertise that you have a manga? The only thing thing that stands out is the request for a background artist. Is that what the post is for? If so you need to be a bit clearer on it. Your post is just too vague.

[Yggy]

digritz, look at the section posted: Anime Take Forums > The Art House > Authors Corner
I wouldn't call it advertise. He's just sharing his work~
And there's obviously nothing wrong at posting it on other forums.

[NrG]

I need Critique. I'll be posting chapter 2 and 3 in about a hour.

[TTally]

Well, personally this looks more like a RP to me than a real story (or perhaps your writing a play?) I get criticized that I use too much detail and not enough dialogue in mine- but really. I would LOVE to see what these people look like, what the city looks like, what time of the day or night it is... ect. Work on that and I give you thumbs up.

[NrG]

Originally Posted by TTally

Well, personally this looks more like a RP to me than a real story (or perhaps your writing a play?) I get criticized that I use too much detail and not enough dialogue in mine- but really. I would LOVE to see what these people look like, what the city looks like, what time of the day or night it is... ect. Work on that and I give you thumbs up.

How do you mean?

[digritz]

Did you get the PM I sent you? I was interested in seeing the other chapters you had.

[NrG]

Originally Posted by digritz

Did you get the PM I sent you? I was interested in seeing the other chapters you had.

Didn't get one. I'm typing the chapters, once I get them proofread I'll post em on all 3 sites.

[azn]

What us thus supposed to be? A script?

[NrG]

Originally Posted by digritz

Did you get the PM I sent you? I was interested in seeing the other chapters you had.

You wouldn't still want those scripts would you lol?